Constructive criticism on poem:? - index.of watch my gf
A change
Tonight could be the loneliest words I say
Considering the desperation to break the old, cold sky
Collision with the memories
To drill, the hope of the night
We save flashes
The index of the infinite
Our comfortable bondage broken
Shattered, split, and was
For a moment, nature has frozen
In view of our eyes for the blind
Then he ran out of
To compensate for lost time
I am now attached to this place
Now I am in two directions
Well, I think, the third
Comfort in the knowledge of our past
Tonight could be the loneliest words I say
How do I see the desperation to break the old cold sky
If you drive into volatile memories
Pierce the night, helpless
We save flashes
The index of the infinite
Wednesday, February 3, 2010
Index.of Watch My Gf Constructive Criticism On Poem:?
2 comments:
They have been successfully used on any device, in a poetic verse, awesome. You are very talented.
But I think you should focus a little more about what to say to tell you how it. The message is clear.
Even if you can write in meter (yeah yeah its boring and what not)
But does a poem flows so well. Its amazing.
They have been successfully used on any device, in a poetic verse, awesome. You are very talented.
But I think you should focus a little more about what to say to tell you how it. The message is clear.
Even if you can write in meter (yeah yeah its boring and what not)
But does a poem flows so well. Its amazing.
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